Closing Doors - Grunge Rock - Songwriting Critique

by K. Fretz
(London)

I guess I'm trying to be like Nirvana here...
Don't really like the name 'Closing Doors,' but it fits with the song... am open to other suggestions (possibly 'Fate'?
Also I don't really like the chorus

Anyway:

Closing Doors (or whatever you wanna call it):

She's overboard,
He's hard to excite,
They have their own,
Pet parasite,

It sucks their blood,
Till there's nothing left,
They're slowly suffocating,
Filthy, depressed,

Filthy and rich,
Filthy and poor,
They run around,
Closing doors,

Chorus: To have your future decided by a toss of a coin,
No need for a coin where you're going
To have your future decided by an unlikely chance,
Scrapping everything you had planned in advance,

The door opens,
Then slams in your face,
Scrawny worthless,
You're an utter disgrace,

Rejected at,
Your hero's door,
You greeted death,
Then bang, no more,

Chorus: To have your future decided by a turn of events,
As if your only worth a couple of pents or cents, whatever
To have your future decided by a toss of a coin,
No need for a coin where you're going,

She's overboard,
He's hard to excite,
They have their own,
Pet parasite,

Filthy and rich,
Filthy and poor,
They run around,
Closing doors,

Rejected at,
Your hero's door,
You greeted death,
Then bang... no more!




^^^ last line is whispered ^^^