Choke lyrics Critique - Piano Song

by Renee
(Florida)

Okay so this needs a lot of work, but it's my first song. It's mostly a bunch of chunks or words and it's probably too long.
But it's about making a mistake with someone because you want to believe they're honest and regretting it later.

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Those eyes, that grin
Everything about you, should be a sin
Your sweet talk made me melt
Your lies were perfect; undeniable

No matter how many times I fell
how many times I broke
I kept thinking, maybe this time?s different
Maybe I am good enough

But I?m not.

Looking back, I meant nothing
Looking back, I was stupid
Looking back, I played pretend,
hoping it would never end
But it won?t happen again
I?m not that girl anymore, and I hope you
Choke.

Well I don?t blame you
Not for wasting my time
Or even for feeding me your lies
I should?ve known, you?re not mine

This regret is torture
Can I take it back?
Can I please, take it back?
It?s not fair
I breakdown thinking of you
I hate you

Looking back, I meant nothing
Looking back, I was stupid
Looking back, I played pretend,
hoping it would never end
But it won?t happen again
I?m not that girl anymore, and I hope you
Choke.

Sitting at home,
Waiting by the phone
It never rang

That voice in the back of my head
She was pretty smart
She knew all along
I?d never belong in your heart


Broken promises
Careless mistakes
False hope
I hope you choke.
Oh, i hope you choke.