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Chat Room Boyfriend (part 1) - Lyric Critiques

by Jessica
(North Texas)

(VERSE 1)
I was online the other day
on a chat room box with hundreds of names
but there was this one name that stood out
from the rest ohhhh
i clicked on his name then selected chat
it was the nicest little chat ive ever had with a boy
so help me god i think im making a big mistake
my momma says dont play with him
you only know this guy from the internet
but i said momma let me go im not a baby anymore
yeah yeah yeah.

(CHORUS)
he told me dont listen
they're just messing with your head
but she said jessie turn away or soon you'll be dead
but im confused out of my mind
im dragged toward each side
help lord im confused
im feeling like ive been used
so help with this state of mind

and help me... with my new chat room boyfriend

(ok this is only the first verse and the chrus but i will soon make a part 2) plaese comment!! :)




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Chat Room Boyfriend (part 1) - Lyric Critiques

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Jun 01, 2009
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sucks
by: Anonymous

get a grip, that sucked

Nov 02, 2011
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nothing
by: Anonymous

there is no structure... no rhythm not really any rhyme... no good message... too corny... too cliche... no critique can really be made...

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