Can I Be Your Baby - Lyrics Critique

by Roxanne Trident
(California)

Iv'e been working on this for quite some time.
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Verse 1:
I cant breath when your warm skin is felt by me
Your'e as perfect as anyone can be
I get blind when its your perfect beauty that I see
Your'e as perfect as anyone can be
I get deaf when I hear your sweet and velvety voice
Your'e unlike all those other boys
And all of these things, they give me no other choice
Your'e unlike all those other boys

Pre chorus:
Pardon my manners, yeah, its just I need to say...

Chorus:
Boy, I need you like nobody else does
If they think it wont work out, nobody knows us
I wanna see you, wanna feel you, wanna kiss you and hear you say: "Hey, you, if I may, can I be your baby?"

This past week has been such a mess
Not sure if Ive been going through some stress
Or maybe It's just I need to be with you
To see you, feel you, maybe kiss you, too

Pre chorus:
Im sorry but theres something stuck in my throat
But Im not sorry that I got to let it show that

CHORUS

Bridge:
Ooooh
Are you single? Can we mingle?
Ooooh
There just something about you that makes me tingle
Ooooh
And when I see you, your eyes, brightly they twinkle
Ooooh, ooooh, ooooh

CHORUS x2

YEAH!