Breathe- Lyrics Critique-

by Francisco Mendez
(Spokane,WA,US)

So this is the first song that i have written. i still feel like i should work on it .
this is has like a slow/spacey acoustic sound lol . tell me what you think plz :)


"Breathe"



Verse1
No,it was never a mistake.
Two hearts crashing together was all fate.
as the clock turns
the earth will learn.
times will change
but our love will be the same.
always there,never apart.
like the air, never to far.



Chorus
So baby just close your eyes & breathe for me tonight.
let the stars be your guide.
as we drift with a wave of neon skies.(neon skies)
We'll see each other again soon, so no need for goodbyes.(no goodbyes..
baby just breathe for me tonight.(tonight)..

Verse2
10,000 miles seems far away
But i promise to keep you at arms length.
Like flames that cannot be tamed
Our love will burn with no end.
Six feet higher into the sky
So lay your head close to my heart..for the meantime


Chorus
So baby just close your eyes & breathe for me tonight.
let the stars be your guide.
as we drift with a wave of neon skies.(neon skies)
We'll see each other again soon, so no need for goodbyes.(no goodbyes)
baby just breathe for me tonight.(tonight)..

Hook
Oh..I'll still be with you(with you)
Just a moon gaze away...(away)



Oh just close your eyes & breathe for me tonight.
let the stars be your guide.
as we drift with a wave of neon skies.(neon skies)
We'll see each other again soon, so no need for goodbyes.(no goodbyes)
baby just breathe for me tonight...(baby just breathe for me tonight)..