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Breaking Apart - Lyrics Critique

by Rianne
(Canada)

Strapped to the wall
Can't cross the line
I can't get to you and I don't know why
Tied to the road
The train's coming down
Why aren't you coming?
You're never around
You and I we're breaking apart
I don't know where to end
I don't know where to start

Please tell me now how you feel
we're going around and around the same wheel
Please tell me what's going on
Before you leave
Before you're gone
Tell me why you are this way
Tell me why we're breaking apart today

Unable to speak
I can't even cry
I really wanna scream and I don't know why
Down on the ground
My heart's beating hard
You don't even care,
my heart's breaking apart
We were so special
Something different
But nothing has started
It's already ended

Please tell me now how you feel
we're going around and around the same wheel
Please tell me what's going on
Before you leave
Before you're gone
Tell me why you are this way
Tell me why we're breaking apart today




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Breaking Apart - Lyrics Critique

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Nov 30, 2009
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Not bad...
by: Anonymous

I don't really feel that it's my place to criticize because I've written two songs. But it's a little on the short end. I'm sure it would be fine with music and everything, but just my opinion. Maybe a a dab more feeling. I don't know much on the subject, so I could be completely wrong in my criticism. But it's just my thoughts. I want to rate this 4 and a half, but i can't, so I'll just give it a 5 :)

Dec 10, 2009
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good
by: Anonymous

I think it's really good And I kinda understand what it's about- Did you write this on like basis of a real story?

Dec 10, 2009
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Thanks for comments =)
by: Rianne

Hey! Thanks for the comments! =) I appreciate the criticism and the compliments. I am only 14 years old..I wrote this song when I was 13 ... the story behind it is about a confused girl about a guy that used to always be there for her but something's happened and she doesn't know what..they're slowly breaking apart thus the title is called 'breaking apart'.

Jul 01, 2011
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good
by: jessica

i really like your song its good its really got something going for it i the words you used in it its a good song

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