Beth Lyrics Critique - Light Rock
by Beth
(Canada)
Hey, just to start off, I apoligize if the spelling is awful, i've never been good at that. Just alittle bit of background, i wrote this right after my boyfriend dumped me and i started to see the real him, without the layer of stupid teenage haze that comes with these sort of crushes.i know its super long but i wasnt sure when to keep and what to cut... if you could just give me some feedback about the flow and such that'd be fantastic ! :)
here goes..
verse:
you've got a trick deck, so when the cards are layed,
you know exactly how everything gets played,
you ran away, but i didnt, i stayed
was that part of your plan, or was it just fate?
you've got a rabbit in your hat, tricks up your sleeve
you light a spark but then you get up and leave,
sometimes you got to remember to breath,
and once in awhile, just try to believe.
chorus:
If you're really such an idiot, why do i still thing about you ?
if you're as stupid as i say you are, how come i still care?
if you're really such a moron, how come i still get jealous?
it's hard to admit, but i lost my best friend
verse:
I'm still trying to figure out what i like about you,
you forget old commitments for something shiny and new,
your past histories should have given a clue,
also you give terrible hugs, its sad but it's true.
your a flirt and a player and a quitter and a brat,
you make excuses instead of telling me flat,
you're impossible to read, i never know where you're at,
but the thing i hate the most is that god damn hat.
chorus:
If you're really such an idiot, why do i still thing about you ?
if you're as stupid as i say you are, how come i still care?
if you're really such a moron, how come i still get jealous?
it's hard to admit, but i lost my best friend
verse:
maybe i've scared you and you've gone off to hide,
my brain doesnt get what i've got built up inside,
it would help if my mind would just choose a side,
i said i didnt want anything to do with you, but i lied.
I'd lie again if i said you wernt fine,
how you tuck in my mittens makes my insides shine,
i've taken false confidence from all of the signs,
you're a sweet talking charmer that i still want to be mine.
chorus:
If you're really such an idiot, why do i still thing about you ?
if you're as stupid as i say you are, how come i still care?
if you're really such a moron, how come i still get jealous?
it's hard to admit, but i lost my best friend
verse:
I'm not over you i'm just not mad anymore,
i wish we could go bacvk to how we were before,
but i've got all these feelings that i still cant ignore,
try as i may, i cant deadbolt that door,
i keep wanting to talk to you but i stop cause i'm scared,
what if you'd forgotten and wernt even there?
after all that has happened and all that we've shared,
i dont know what i'd do if you just didnt care.
chorus:
If you're really such an idiot, why do i still thing about you ?
if you're as stupid as i say you are, how come i still care?
if you're really such a moron, how come i still get jealous?
it's hard to admit, but i lost my best friend