AndyL.UK. Dream the dream. Please Critique. (Lyric Critique)

by andrew lavelle
(uk)

I would like a chance to write lyrics for commercial puposes can anyone help me. email lavellea@ btinternet.com



Dream the dream and not the lie.

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Let's all be uplifted.
Like a rainbow that has drifted.
From dawn's light.
Into deep night.

Life's a midnight apparition.
Just another superstition.
So be like a child watching the sky.
Dream the dream and not the lie.
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Update the daily blog.
Because it's just a tiny cog.
In a machine that's gone astray.
That bombard's us every day.

With who said what.
And that they've got.
The latest trend.
Will the bank's lend.

For the illusion of ideal.
Of what everone should reveal.
To the world.
Like human insect's curled.
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Chorus.
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Like a moth around a flame.
Dancing with death, without shame.
Given the chance of second sight.
Would escape into the night.

So behind the mirrored face.
The mask for the rat race
The inner turmoil we feel
If we ever dare to reveal.

Before the final revelation.
There must be contemplation.
Life's mirror of shard's.
Broken, simply to disregard.
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Chorus.
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Perspective is the key.
That will set everbody free.
Is the only aspiration.
To be trapped in dedication.

Just staring at a screen
In need of a change of scene.
Almost ready to scream.
At the commercial dream.

So steal a moment from the day.
Open a window and gaze away.
Drift like a child watching the sky.
Dream your dream and not their lie.
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Chorus.
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