Alternative Lyrics Critique - Breather

by John
(Mahomet, IL, United States of America)

VERSE 1
if i said tonight would be
the last time that youd hear from me
a last goodbye---
would you go on and forget about
the rest as the waves carry me out
tonight---

BRIDGE
i am holding my breath,
im taking a rest
cause even the best of us
only have so much to give
and maybe tonight,
itll be alright
but maybe this restlessness
is all that i get
is this all that i get?----

CHORUS
this cant be it, theres gotta be more
but whatever you do, dont let this fade
are simple blue skys the only highs
ill ever experiance in this place
so take me away---
and dont let me---
dont let me go---

VERSE 2
gazing at the starry sky
i know i need a spark back in my eyes
am i---
growing too dependant
am i slipping towards the end
or can you hold me back
for a while--- hold in place this smile---

CHORUS

INTERLUDE
drive through me with your bright eyes
cuz this is only real for the moment
as the dawn breaks the moonlight
comfort me now
"itll be alright"
tonight---

CHORUS X2

OUTRO
oh, dont let me--- go---


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