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Alone Lyrics Critique - pop ballad

by Lauren Laine
(Pennsylvania)

Can you hear me
the young girl cries
these drops
are the tears from her eyes

how can I call this my home
in a world where I'm all alone
trapped behind the guilt inside
drownt by the tears that i have cried
I am alone

the rain from the sky
symbolizes the tears from my eyes
and when I'm lookin' back
I just can't stand it no more
oh oh

how can I call this my home
in a world where I'm all alone
trapped behind the guilt inside
drownt by the tears that i have cried
I am alone

Now how can I survive
in this world for I
just can not see
the girl that I can be
when I am alone
I- am- alone

so how can I call this my home
in a world where I'm all alone
trapped behind the guilt inside
drownt by the tears that i have cried
I am alone

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Alone Lyrics Critique - pop ballad

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Jan 24, 2011
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Lyrics looks great
by: Danierla

These are great lyrics. Putting them in third person might make the song much more appealing. Just my opinion.

Jan 27, 2011
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cool
by: Brianna

I reckon she's right third persond would make it stand out alot more.

Dec 06, 2011
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Good song idea
by: Kriss

I like your song idea it could use a little bit of help. It could be good in third person or I think it could be good in the form it's in. Sometimes I think it shows emotion stronger when it's coming from the person's viewpoint. If you would like to talk to me more about your song email me at cowgirlkriss@gmail.com Wish you well.

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