: Lyrics - Critique: Alternative/Screamo song?

by Savannah R.
(San Antonio, Texas(:)

Okay--so, basically this song is pretty self-explanatory. i know that this isn't very good, but i'm a beginner. i'm only 13:). help me out? constructive criticism is always appreciated!

PS: bold = screams.

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You changed--you decided that i wasn't good enough for you, and set me aside to rot in this fucked up place. You said you loved me, loved me like no other, and i thought that meant forever. I guess forever wasn't long enough.

Go ahead. Forget about me! Do what you want--it's your life, and no one's trying to stop you from living it. Just remember one thing--if I'm going down, your going down with me! "Best Friends" means forever, bitch.

Chorus: I'm done, I'm done--your a fucking disgrace! I'm nothing to you; well, the feeling's mutual. Don't feel sorry for me, I don't need your fucking sympathy.

Go out there, and make new friends. They aren't real--they never will be, not like I was. But you made your fucking choice. Don't come running to me when they rip your beating black heart out of your chest. I'm not for fucking back-up friend! I deserve better than this.

[Repeat Chorus (x2),

I'll take the nearest gun, point it your way, and pull the trigger. I'll blow that fucking smile off that fucked-up face of yours. I'll meet you in hell, best friend.

"Best Friends" means forever--it means forever and always. I'll meet you there; I'll meet you there!





feedback please!<3